Best Sentence #54
I am now officially opening the comments for this post to a little guessing game. What number best sentence will I be at when I have officially finished a full draft of the dissertation? (Revisions aside for the moment.)
Anyone who guesses Best Sentence #319 or some other depressing number will be booed.
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The game prototype required the local environment to be temporarily modified with a range of embedded sensors and a stronger WLAN. These modifications represent the project’s attempt to emulate the desired future state of ubiquitous computing. In this way, the conference room where the game was played was, in a sense, as fantastic and make-believe as the imaginary archipelago depicted on the PDA screens. It embodied a fantasy of the future of ubicomp technology.
Anyone who guesses Best Sentence #319 or some other depressing number will be booed.
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The game prototype required the local environment to be temporarily modified with a range of embedded sensors and a stronger WLAN. These modifications represent the project’s attempt to emulate the desired future state of ubiquitous computing. In this way, the conference room where the game was played was, in a sense, as fantastic and make-believe as the imaginary archipelago depicted on the PDA screens. It embodied a fantasy of the future of ubicomp technology.
posted by Jane | 1:09 PM
2 Comments:
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Nice sentences. Very clear.
Only one observation...
"ubiquitous computing" = "ubicomp", right?
Then why "ubiquitous computing" at the end of the first sentence and "ubicomp" at the end of the second? For variety?
Everybody has their own style. Me, I would have made it easy on myself by defining my terms, acronyms and abbreviations at the outset and sticking to them throughout (You may have. What do I know? I haven't read your 1st chapter). Consistency is not only essential to clarity but also essential to ease of writing...
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