Best Sentence #82
A brief observation before my best sentence of today.
As I write a chapter on the so-called "dangerously" immersive qualities of alternate reality games, I am reminded of two of the opening messages of The Beast:
"Get out. Deep Water. You would drown."
"Get out. Dark Dream. You will not wake up."
I just want to say that I think perhaps the same warnings should be delivered to graduate students embarking on the dissertation writing process. It sometimes feels as if I am in a fog of text from which I will never wake up.
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It was a decidedly dark introduction to the game, one that portended a potentially dangerous level of immersion through its imagery of deep sleep, water, and death.
As I write a chapter on the so-called "dangerously" immersive qualities of alternate reality games, I am reminded of two of the opening messages of The Beast:
"Get out. Deep Water. You would drown."
"Get out. Dark Dream. You will not wake up."
I just want to say that I think perhaps the same warnings should be delivered to graduate students embarking on the dissertation writing process. It sometimes feels as if I am in a fog of text from which I will never wake up.
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It was a decidedly dark introduction to the game, one that portended a potentially dangerous level of immersion through its imagery of deep sleep, water, and death.
posted by Jane | 2:08 PM
8 Comments:
In this, my second visit (you might want to thank the folks at Blogger for keeping you up front on their list), I still won't debate, but I would, as an editor, rethink the use of the word "dark" twice. Just sayin'.
Oh yeah, you're totally right. :) I should mention that when I post these sentences, they're pretty much always first drafts, with nothing line edited for prettiness yet. Lemme see if I can fix that now.
wow. my brain hurts
No matter how clever the writing, if it is not easily seen, what is the point?
I 'd love to read your stuff, but your color choice for text makes it invisible...
Meh. I once read a sentence that gave me a papercut while turning the page in anticipation of the object and punctuation.
Daniel, good point, of course that's something I say elswhere in this section. You might say that my sentence here is ironic itself-- I am to some degree satirizing the hysteria ("players are losing the ability to tell reality from the game) that has emerged around these kinds of games.
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