Best Sentence #9
Back in Berkeley wrestling with the same stupid section that has been giving me trouble for 3 full days now. I am about to finish it up, knowing though that it needs to be revised to have a cleaner and more persistent argument. The kind of writing I am doing now is the desperate feel-your-way writing, where you write things that are more poetic than usual. I can feel what I have to say, but I don't know what I have to say. So the words are... a little more like traditional performance studies text than I usually write.
Here's one such sentence that I actually like, and that I think works, even though it is the first coining of the phrase post-polar and I don't stop to explain it. I hope readers will stop to think what it means --through the force of two poles pulling simultaneously-- and appreciate the interpretiveness of the phrasing, as opposed to me spelling it out. But maybe in revision it will get spelled out.
Convention and classification itself is a kind of creative force, one-half of the post-polar play dynamic.
UPDATE:
Ha ha, so much for best sentence #9... I've already edited it to be more clear about what I mean. Here's the new version:
Convention and classification itself is a kind of creative force, one-half of the necessary polarity that animates the play dynamic.
Here's one such sentence that I actually like, and that I think works, even though it is the first coining of the phrase post-polar and I don't stop to explain it. I hope readers will stop to think what it means --through the force of two poles pulling simultaneously-- and appreciate the interpretiveness of the phrasing, as opposed to me spelling it out. But maybe in revision it will get spelled out.
Convention and classification itself is a kind of creative force, one-half of the post-polar play dynamic.
UPDATE:
Ha ha, so much for best sentence #9... I've already edited it to be more clear about what I mean. Here's the new version:
Convention and classification itself is a kind of creative force, one-half of the necessary polarity that animates the play dynamic.
1 Comments:
hate too say it but don't me wrong i loved it but was not my family's favorite.
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